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Alphanumeric codes,
Under the skin,
Commerce is booming,
The world from unexplored to overpopulated,

001, 001
The children sing
Individuals are muted,
Complete the ring,

Our veins will pump with binary,
The blood of information,
And the weakness of our dependences,
Will bury us as a nation,

001, 001
The children sing,
Ashes to ashes
Silicon to dust
©2005-2009 ~somebody5000
:iconsomebody5000:

Author's Comments

Beware of an unchecked future, of consequences and responsibilities, and how we act as humanity, not just on nationality.


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:icondrowned-kitten:
Great.
Second and fourth stanzas are perfect :)
I'm not so sure about the lines
"And the weakness of our dependences,
Will bury us as a nation,"
- I like the concept but I think a rewording could help it flow better.
I really do like the
"001, 001
The children sing"
part.
+fav

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grrrr.
:iconrijjka:
I too liked the "001, 001 the children sing," part. And the rest of the poem I enjoyed to. Uoi've certainly got the flow thing better than I do, so me critizing that would be well... hypocritical. Your point was was also seen, I've seen what your talking about in my life so I understand.
:iconsuperphreak:
This is a real eye opener, I really like the third stanza
:iconm32:
interesting choice of words. doesn't quite roll of the tongue. gets the point across though.

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"listen to the wisdom of m32" ~annubissl
:iconm32:
interesting choice of words. doesn't quite roll of the tongue. gets the point across though.

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"listen to the wisdom of m32" ~annubissl
:iconinureyes:
we live in such a materialistic society with magazine cover philosophies that it seems a miracle whenever someone manages to break out speak of the corruption especially in the way you so wonderfully do.

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