Alphanumeric codes,
Under the skin,
Commerce is booming,
The world from unexplored to overpopulated,
001, 001
The children sing
Individuals are muted,
Complete the ring,
Our veins will pump with binary,
The blood of information,
And the weakness of our dependences,
Will bury us as a nation,
001, 001
The children sing,
Ashes to ashes
Silicon to dust














Comments
Second and fourth stanzas are perfect
I'm not so sure about the lines
"And the weakness of our dependences,
Will bury us as a nation,"
- I like the concept but I think a rewording could help it flow better.
I really do like the
"001, 001
The children sing"
part.
+fav
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grrrr.
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"listen to the wisdom of m32" ~annubissl
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"listen to the wisdom of m32" ~annubissl
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